ive wrote more on it and want your opinions please! and any improvements!

I awoke suddenly to the taunting sound of screams in my ear. I turned toward molly; my heart pounded just looking at her frantic face of pure terror. Her eyes were set on them. These two men, casual coifed from head to toe, were swarmed around me like vultures. They were panicking; I could see the sweat dripping of their naked faces. I clutched molly in my arms as I felt myself violently shaking all over. Her cries were getting louder and louder as she buried her head in my arms. I felt a tear stroll down my face as I saw one of the men desperately heaving out a large thick rope. He grasped it tightly around his hand, took a quick glance at us and started circling us, jamming the rope closer into our skin. My heart was delicately throbbing. I tried to stay calm for molly, who was laying there, her soft warm curls pressed against my bosom letting out her final cries of desperation. But inside; I was screaming. There was no-where to run, there was no where to hide. The streets where completely desolate and I knew, I just knew we were going to be taken. I had to remember everything about those men. I kept reciting the purple suits with black scruffy ties and ballroom style shoes. The man on the right had a dark navy bruise about the size of a golf ball on his left hand. They both had neat hairlines with combed back hair. One of the men was dramatically shorter than the other, yet stood with a superior stance to him. His fingernails were a murky yellow colour, clearly from years of heavy smoking. The taller mans eyes were greener than grass, he had deep set wrinkles and shadowy bags, yet his face shone with a natural glow. I couldn’t bear to look at them no more.

If this is coursework, please revise it. Heavily. I’ll try to be constructive. Use fewer adverbs. (-ly words) Try stronger verbs, rather than modifying the ones you use so much. Check capitalisation. Check the use of semi-colons. Yours aren’t properly used. Also, your sentences are too long for the most part. Where you use a comma, you can almost always end the sentence, They have more punch if they are shorter. There are great thoughts here, but in your present form, not many people will bother to read them. Learn to write properly, then try for avant garde. Good luck. If you want any help with revision, I’ll be glad to help.

He has everything he needs or wants!

He drinks beer (only) and smokes cigars but only a certain kind (gift baskets with various types are not an option – I’ve tried).
He restored a car, but it’s perfected and nothing I could know is needed. (’57 Bel Aire)
He works with tools but owns every type – probably more than one, he’s already told me that.
He wears cologne, but can’t smell!
He’s a freemason, but I’ve exhausted all gifts that relate
He golfs, but has brand new clubs, bag, shoes, magazine subscr. He already stocks up on golf balls and tees.
He has a brand new computer, and doesn’t care for any other tech-related items.
He buys new clothes all the time and hates my taste (he’s a bit, um, unstylish)
He’s fun – but have jokingly bought him nerf guns, portable videogames and remote control cars in the past.
No hunting or fishing or bowling.
He loves food – but a "meat and potatoes" type of guy – one that already has Omaha steaks deliver all the time.
No sweet tooth.
Will not watch a movie twice, nor tv shows.
He gets gift cards from clients all the time.
No ties.
Renovating the house – well, hired help is
He gardens, but barely. Tomatoes and squash only, I think.
Likes jewelry, but his taste is not affordable.
Doesn’t care for sports – goes to some NFL games, but not a true "fan"
New wallet. His type of watches wouldn’t suit my budget.
He already has a stack of books he claims to be "getting a start on"
Mom deals with decor. Nothing like that would be of interest.
No work gear and he has a company car. GPS, cell phone and accessories are redundant.
Travels so much for work, he doesn’t care to go for pleasure. Travel items – luggage, travel pillows, etc. would never be used.
He’s practical.
We have a huge inground pool. Mom buys the fun stuff, and other people come to clean.
We have a game room – likes billards and darts – new balls, cues, chalk-holder even. Table was recently recovered and whole dartboard set-up is new.
Has an outdoor firepit – had two, gave me one- He already have me his old patio furniture that was from this summer, he didn’t like it.
He has all the music he cares for, I’ve tried to buy him some and he either already had it or didn’t care b /c he has satellite radio.
Would not be caught dead at a concert.
Does his own lawn, oddly enough. He has all the needs, like mower, leaf blower, weed eater, pesticides…

ANY other ideas? In reality he’s fun but honestly has all the necessities. Therefore, I need a unique gift that isn’t generic – but must be practical too. He’s not a fan of "gifting for the sake of gifting." Also, not religious.
I think all of you have given me some great ideas! Not sure which I’ll pick, but I’ll def check out some of the websites you all recommended. He loves nice wallets, and his are always getting worn out. As for the classic car stuff, I just have no idea where to begin – he’s not the type for "novelty" items like keychains and such, but maybe I could get out of him if he’d like a new gear stick or seat covers – his car is bad-a and I get it eventually!
The utopia beer from Sam Adams is a great idea (I worked at a liquor store all through college and we had the really neat looking metal bottle) for the connoisseur, but my dad likes bud and bud only…

Anyways, thanks for all the ideas – you have helped immensely!

Still, any other novel ideas are still welcome !!!

So he has a fully restored 57 Chevy. You don’t put in that kind or time or money into an old car unless you like old cars. There are a lot of places online that sell parts for old cars. They also sell other really neat stuff that relate to old cars. Shirts, hats, keychains, jewelery, lighters, chairs, clocks…..literally anything you can think of. Try them, you might find something there.

mayonnaise
cheese
popcorn
candy
gum
cat food
chips
ice cream
shoes
glasses
golf ball
microwave
cloth softener
zip lock bag
washer
body wash
napkin
perfume
car
bag
plane
gas
lawn mower
sunscreen
film (to take pictures with)
gas
mail
help

merci!!!

mayonnaise
fromage
pop-corn
Candy
Gomme
Chat alimentaire
puces
crème glacée
chaussures
lunettes
balle de golf
four à micro-ondes
tissu adoucisseur
sac de verrou ZIP
Laveuse
lavage des corps
serviette
parfum
voiture
sac
plan
gaz
Tondeuse à gazon
écran solaire
film (pour prendre des photos avec)
gaz
courrier
Aide

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MIAMI GOLF Sunset
5850 South Dixie Hwy (US-1)
Miami, Florida. 33143

www.miamigolf.com
1-800-643-GOLF

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heres a list of what you should get and links:

golf clothing:
http://www.iznadgolf.com/womensgolfapparel.html

shoes:
http://www.iznadgolf.com/lagosh.html

golf clubs:
http://www.iznadgolf.com/womenssets.html

pull cart:
http://www.iznadgolf.com/pusandpulgol.html

good luck

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